Bakuman. (2010–2013): Season 1, Episode 6 - Episode #1.6 - full transcript
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Arithmetic
Takagi Akito {It's the really large box next to the 100. You can barely
see anything written, but that's what's there. The rest isn't important.}
- Cooking - Takagi Akito {In
the name box. The big rectangle on the upper right.}
Motion: "Them"
Them: Start Fade
"Them" frame motion
- Yuueisha is a parody of Shuueisha, the company who publishes Shounen Jump.
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YUUEISHA
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YUUEISHA
YUUEISHA
MEETING CORNER HOURS OF OPERATION:
MANAGEMENT
MANAGEMENT
The Earth
we live on
is not the
real Earth.
It is all
nothing but a
duplicate made
for observation
and experiments.
Yes. By "them".
Having been
injured in war
and returning
home, Hayato...
stepped on
the ground
of his
homeland for
the first
time in ages.
But all that waited for him was...
the "death" of his lover, Amy.
- m 0 0 l 0 0 l 25 0 l 25 40 l 0
40 l 0 0 It was a cruel world.
-
-
Amy!?
Pull yourself
together, Hayato.
She's dead.
-
-
I saw her.
She was over there!
Ugh. It's so bright...
When the light that
covered his whole
body disappeared,
he was in a place
he did not recognize.
Where... the hell am I...?
Amy!
Please wait, Amy!
Why're you running!?
\h\h\h\h\h\hWelcome, "other Hayato-kun".
You're calling me "other"...?
What are you
talking about?
Where am I?
Earth.
Yes. The "Real Earth".
The "Other Earth"
where you clones live
is a test model
made for the sake
of the "Real Earth".
In order for us
"Real Earthlings"
to simulate different
problems.
No way...
(
(
Having gotten too
close to the truth,
Hayato was taken
prisoner.
A resistance
organization
calling themselves
"Missing"
rescued people
like him.
Then, you guys, too?
Yes. We're "Other Earthlings".
(
In order for them
to send in investigators,
they take us "clones"
captive.
And when the
investigators return,
our memories are
erased and we're
sent back again.
(
But if the investigators get
into some sort of trouble
and end up dead,
we lose our means
of getting home and
have no choice
but to live here.
(
In this
god♪♪♪♪
annoying
"utopia".
(
If it's a
way home you need,
I have one!
(
Having returned to
the "Other Earth",
Hayato reported
the truth
to the populace.
Now we have to
let them know
that we're their
puppets to be
manipulated!
-
-
And the
counter attack
of the
"Other Earthlings"
began.
Hey, hey.
Can you really
shoot me?
Your original?
(
- (
-
We're not
test subject
for your
experiments!
Eat this!!
(
Guh!!
(
I knew it... you guys are...
(
beasts...
- (The "Real Earthlings" surrendered. But that was the conclusion
that they had reached after many years of observation. That is, that the Other Earthlings were foolish savages.
(
Amy... It's over...
It's all over.
(
But you're still not here.
(
I won't forgive you people.
(
I'm your Amy.
Your girlfriend
that died was
an investigator.
If the investigator died,
then the "clone"
shouldn't be able
to return,
but you appeared
right in front of me.
(
Your "original'
forgave me.
He was a kind man.
(
But,
(
the one I love is you!
Ah, I missed you, Hayato!
(
While feeling an
intimate connection
with his loved one,
Hayato had some
feelings of
bitterness.
(
The
"genuine one"
and
"fake one"...
(
"Real Earth"
and
"Other Earth"
...
In the end,
which one
was truly
right...?
Hattori Akira
Corporation: Yuueisha
Weekly "Shounen Jack"
Editorial Department
( Co. ) Prince Eight
( Co.) Prince Enterprise
Prince
( Co. ) Prince
Studio
Preview of Next Episode
Tears and Tears
Hello, this is Shounen
Jack's editorial department.
Is this your first time
submitting something?
Is that so?
Then could you give me
your name and phone number?
Mashiro Moritaka-san...
Ah, a two-person team.
Takagi Akito-san.
All right.
Then, how about tomorrow?
Middle school students?
[Opening]
Okay, I understand.
Thank you very much.
Tomorrow, three o'clock,
at the reception desk.
"Tell them that they have an appointment with
Hattori-san from Weekly Shounen Jack," they said.
All of a sudden, it's set
for tomorrow. Amazing, eh?
I guess that's what you'd
expect from a publisher.
So, what do we do?
I think meeting an hour
beforehand is early enough.
How about one o'clock
at North Yakusa Station?
Just as long as we get there.
Right.
I'm going to look through the manuscript.
Yeah, let me check the lines too.
Where's Moritaka?
He came home, didn't he?
When he does come home, he
shuts himself away in his room.
I wonder if he's pushing himself too hard.
Thanks for the meal.
Mangakas sure are cool!
You have books you wrote by
yourself all lined up in a row.
I'm still a gambler though. {They are really pushing it... all
these characters had stopped showing up by this point in the manga.}
A gambler?
A mangaka is someone who can make a
living by drawing manga their whole lives.
You either need to have a
big hit or a lot of smaller hits.
Beyond that, you're just a gambler.
The drawings are good, but
I don't know about my story.
The story is good, but I don't know about my
drawings.
You're early.
You're even earlier Shuujin, why is that?
Why? Well...
Even though we worked all last
night, for some reason I woke up early.
Me too.
I just, kind of, can't sit still
about this.
My older brother asked me to
return with next week's Jack for him.
We can't ask for something like that.
By the way, your brother goes
to a good college, doesn't he?
After he failed to get into the national
university, he basically stopped trying.
Now he spends all his time with club
activities and going on group dates every day.
Enjoying his youth, that sort of thing.
I guess he sees what's ahead of him.
So that's why you thought of becoming a mangaka? {qc - possibly remove
question mark, not a direct question, more of a false assumption}
No, the reason why I decided not to become
a salaryman was because of my parents.
My dad used to work at Oute Bank... {Proper elongation?
If this is incorrect, you can change it back}
Dad's going to be late today as well?
Yes.
What about big brother?
He said that he has a cram
school test, so he'll be late.
Acchan, so that you don't
lose to your big brother,
you must study hard, okay?
Okay...
Oh yeah, how did this afternoon's test go?
My old lady was a high school teacher.
Every day she'd fervently
make me and my brother study.
You're amazing, Acchan.
I'm sure you'll make your dad proud.
Actually, by watching me study,
it felt like she was
trying to distract herself.
For the next one, keep
it up and do your best.
Well, that's how it feels,
thinking about it now.
But even so...
Why?!
So covering for your boss's responsibility
means getting fired, doesn't it?
There's nothing I can do.
Nothing you can do?
Then what are we going to do?
Huh? What?
What about our kids and the mortgage we still have to pay on the house? {This is kind of an approximation
because this very hard to hear. You can kind of infer the parts that you can't hear though.}
To be honest, back then I didn't
really understand what was going on.
I'm home.
Welcome back.
You went shopping, Dad?
Your mother asked me to.
Let me go with you next time.
Sure, next time.
It's a promise.
Then when I was the in
fifth grade of elementary...
Avenge.
Your dad...
You've got to avenge him, okay?
Acchan...
Avenge?
Does that mean work at the
bank and become a manager?
Was that why she was making me study?
When I thought that, I started to hate it.
Or rather, I just couldn't take it anymore.
Acchan...
I'm...
I'm not your tool, Mom!
I'll decide my own future!
Ever since then, they haven't
had any objections about what I do.
They're good parents, really.
Ah, sorry.
I got a little melodramatic there.
Then, it was the same with you
wanting to become a mangaka with me?
Yeah, they know; they're ignoring it.
What?
No, I'm glad I got to hear it.
You're smart,
but I've been a little unsure if I can rely on
you when it comes to plans about the future.
Well, maybe you were right to think that.
All right, how about we get going?
Okay.
Finally, huh?
I can't believe middle school boys
like us can bring in a manuscript.
It's like a dream.
As long as you just write a manuscript,
they say anyone can bring one in.
The problem is how that work is judged.
Yeah.
What business do you
have at the company today?
Ah, um, we came to bring in a manuscript...
Then please follow the
procedure at the reception desk.
T-Thank you very much.
Welcome, how may I help you?
We came to bring in a manuscript.
Do you have an appointment?
Y-Yes, at three o'clock with
Hattori-san from Weekly Shounen Jack.
In that case, please fill this out. {The
paper already has English for all the boxes.}
T-There are two of us, so
shouldn't each of us fill one out?
No, it'll be fine as long as
you fill in the number of people.
Uh-Uhm, I'm still a student, so what
should I put for company name and such?
Well for that, just to be safe, please just put in your school's name. {This is all really
important. I can't believe there was no "how do I fill out the form" scene in the manga.}
Ah, I'm sorry, I made a mistake!
It's okay, I'll give you a new card.
I-I'm done.
Good job.
Please wait just a minute.
Okay, however long it takes.
She said it'd just be a minute.
This is the reception desk.
Takagi-sama and
Mashiro-sama are here to see you.
Yes.
Sorry for the wait.
Hattori-san will be down very soon.
Please wait in booth
number three over there.
Thanks for your time.
Thank you very much.
Bringing something into Jack...
doesn't mean we are going
to the editorial department.
Looks like it.
I understand your enthusiasm,
but...
You need to be more
considerate of the readers.
Yes, Sir...
So let's just forget either of
us ever saw this manuscript.
Eh? {Mistral suggested adding this line
because it was missing. Maybe finetime it?}
So, think about it some more
and try drawing something else.
I'll be waiting for an
interesting manga next time.
T-Thank you very much...
D-Did you hear that just now?
He brought something in, like us.
Probably.
I was pretty confident
on the way here, but...
I'm worried we're going to be
told that what we have is shit.
It'd be scarier to be heavily praised the
very first time you brought something in.
My uncle used to say that if they offered
you tea, it was a success up to that point.
R-Really?
Takagi-kun and Mashiro-kun?
Ah, yes!
I'm Hattori from Weekly
Shounen Jack, nice to meet you.
Nice to meet you!
Well, to start with, may
I see your manuscript?
Ah, okay.
Please, go ahead.
You two don't need to be so up tight.
O-Okay.
Let me read it one more time.
[Eyecatch]
. {He reads it word for word. Typset it if you want, doesn't matter. There's also the option of ONLY typsetting and
not putting in regular subtitles for this part except when there's nothing written onscreen. But I'm fine, typsetter can decide that.}
The Earth we live on is not the real Earth.
It is all nothing but a duplicate
made for observation and experiments.
.
Having been injured in a war
and returning home, Hayato...
stepped on the ground of his
homeland for the first time in years.
It was a cruel world.
Pull yourself together Hayato.
I saw her.
It's so bright...
When the light that covered his body disappeared,
he was in a place he did not recognize.
Where... am I?
Amy!
Please wait, Amy!
Why are you running?!
Welcome, "other" Hayato-kun.
You're calling me "other?"
What are you talking about?
Yes, the "Real Earth."
The "Other Earth", where you clones live...
is a test model made for
the sake of the "Real Earth."
In order for us "Real Earthlings"
to simulate different scenarios.
Having gotten too close to the
truth, Hayato was taken prisoner.
A resistance organization calling
themselves rescued people like him.
Then, you guys too?
Yes, we're "Other Earthlings."
In order for them to send in
investigators, they take us clones captive.
Then when the investigators return, our
memories are erased and we're sent back again.
But if the investigators get into
some sort of trouble and end up dead,
we lose our means of getting home
and have no choice but to live here.
In this god♪♪♪♪ annoying utopia.
If it's a way home you need, I have one!
Having returned to the "Other Earth",
Hayato reported the truth to the populace.
Now, it's time to let them know that we
are not their puppets to be manipulated!
Then, the counterattack of
the "Other Earthlings" began.
Hey, hey.
Can you really shoot me?
Your "original"?
We are not test subject
for your experiments!
Eat this!
I knew it, you guys are...
The "Real Earthlings" surrendered.
But that was the conclusion that they had
reached after many years of observation.
That is, that the "Other Earthlings" were foolish savages. {These
two lines are in the same box, they're just separated by a space.}
Amy, It's over...
I won't forgive you!
I'm your Amy.
Your girlfriend that
died was an investigator.
If the investigator died, then the
clone shouldn't be able to return,
but you appeared right in front of me.
Your "original" forgave me.
the one I love is you!
I missed you, Hayato!
While feeling an intimate
connection with his loved one,
Hayato had some feelings of bitterness.
The genuine one and the fake one.
"Real Earth" and "Other Earth."
In the end, which one was truly right?
You guys did well.
I'm getting some coffee,
do you want anything?
W-We'll both have coffee too, please.
Right?
Y-Yeah.
Um, did you think up the story together?
No, I did the story and
Mashiro did the drawings.
It's totally split.
I see.
Are you trying to become pros?
Yes, as soon as we can!
Well, I'll give you my opinions
on the story first then, okay?
All right.
As a whole, it's a well
put together sci-fi story,
and I think people who like
that would be drawn into it.
Okay.
But this is more of a
novel than it is a manga.
There's too much narration and
the lines are very expositional too.
Unless the story progresses through the drawings and
characters, there's no point in it being a manga.
We decided I wouldn't interfere in about the
story, so I didn't say anything about it,
But for an editor, saying
something like that is a given.
As a story, it's really well made.
So maybe you would be suited
to do something like a light novel?
No, I definitely want to be an original author
for a manga.
I wonder if we can
have faith in this person?
Is that so?
And, Mashiro-kun, wasn't it?
Yes.
I think you definitely have a
great ability for rough sketching.
Thank you.
But even so, this isn't manga artwork.
There are too many lines, there's no difference in
lines between the characters and the background.
Put in more distortion.
You need to make the
drawings your own style.
Okay.
Mashiro has only been
using a pen for two months.
Two months?
Really?
Y-Yes.
If that's true, I'll really be looking
forward to what you do in the future.
Do you two like this kind of story?
So you're saying that it doesn't stand
out as something you'd see in ?
Takagi-kun, you're the type who writes while calculating
how you can become popular and sell, aren't you?
This might be just my observation, but
there are two general types you
can divide successful mangaka into.
First, there are the types that put everything they
have into drawing what they want and make a hit.
If you're being positive, you
could say they're geniuses.
If you're speaking negatively,
you might call them naturals.
Then there are ones like Takagi-kun, the type that
calculates as much as they can to produce a hit.
However, the ones who make big hits are,
overwhelmingly, the people who don't calculate.
Ah, sorry. Maybe that wasn't
the best way to phrase it.
I suppose what I'm saying is, those who draw with
calculation have much higher hurdles to overcome.
On the other hand, the ones who can
produce hits by calculating are strong.
They won't be done after just one work.
Even for us editors,
those types are life-savers.
I can't force you,
but I would like for you to not bring
your work to any other publishers.
If possible, I'd like to
see you two later as well.
Let's do our best together in .
If anything comes up, send me and
e-mail at the address I wrote on there.
When I have time, I'll reply.
Don't get so excited over an email address.
When I find a golden egg, I give out my
cell phone number without a second thought.
You guys are still around bronze.
Not only did he give us thorough
opinions, he's being this frank with us.
For now I think I'm going to send this manuscript
around for the monthly award, is that okay?
Monthly award?
You mean the excellence award given
to one of the works submitted every month?
So, does that mean it's good?
It's not that easy.
But with manga, you get ten different
opinions from ten different people.
There might even be people who
say that this could get into the finals.
To be honest, even we don't
know for sure what'll be a hit or not.
If we did, there wouldn't be
new series that end so quickly.
A work becoming a hit is,
for the most part, a gamble.
Beyond that, you're just a gambler.
Please contact me once
you've got your next work done.
Until then.
It's been nice working with you!
Thank you very much.
It was a success, right?
On the first work we brought in, he gave us
his business card and even his email address.
What do you think, Shuujin?
About what?
I think Hattori-san was good.
Yeah, I think so too.
Hey, how did it go? {how'd / how did
PHONE TEXT HERE
/♪♪ Start OP ♪♪/
Arithmetic
Takagi Akito {It's the really large box next to the 100. You can barely
see anything written, but that's what's there. The rest isn't important.}
- Cooking - Takagi Akito {In
the name box. The big rectangle on the upper right.}
Motion: "Them"
Them: Start Fade
"Them" frame motion
- Yuueisha is a parody of Shuueisha, the company who publishes Shounen Jump.
- YUUEISHA
YUUEISHA
Translator TLc
kewl0210 Chrno
Timing Edit
KmE bobo343
Typesetting Karaoke
scol, KmE Jecht, KmE, pablo212
QC
Echo_Chidori Z4kku
Encode
pablo212
Carrot and Stick
YUUEISHA
YUUEISHA
MEETING CORNER HOURS OF OPERATION:
MANAGEMENT
MANAGEMENT
The Earth
we live on
is not the
real Earth.
It is all
nothing but a
duplicate made
for observation
and experiments.
Yes. By "them".
Having been
injured in war
and returning
home, Hayato...
stepped on
the ground
of his
homeland for
the first
time in ages.
But all that waited for him was...
the "death" of his lover, Amy.
- m 0 0 l 0 0 l 25 0 l 25 40 l 0
40 l 0 0 It was a cruel world.
-
-
Amy!?
Pull yourself
together, Hayato.
She's dead.
-
-
I saw her.
She was over there!
Ugh. It's so bright...
When the light that
covered his whole
body disappeared,
he was in a place
he did not recognize.
Where... the hell am I...?
Amy!
Please wait, Amy!
Why're you running!?
\h\h\h\h\h\hWelcome, "other Hayato-kun".
You're calling me "other"...?
What are you
talking about?
Where am I?
Earth.
Yes. The "Real Earth".
The "Other Earth"
where you clones live
is a test model
made for the sake
of the "Real Earth".
In order for us
"Real Earthlings"
to simulate different
problems.
No way...
(
(
Having gotten too
close to the truth,
Hayato was taken
prisoner.
A resistance
organization
calling themselves
"Missing"
rescued people
like him.
Then, you guys, too?
Yes. We're "Other Earthlings".
(
In order for them
to send in investigators,
they take us "clones"
captive.
And when the
investigators return,
our memories are
erased and we're
sent back again.
(
But if the investigators get
into some sort of trouble
and end up dead,
we lose our means
of getting home and
have no choice
but to live here.
(
In this
god♪♪♪♪
annoying
"utopia".
(
If it's a
way home you need,
I have one!
(
Having returned to
the "Other Earth",
Hayato reported
the truth
to the populace.
Now we have to
let them know
that we're their
puppets to be
manipulated!
-
-
And the
counter attack
of the
"Other Earthlings"
began.
Hey, hey.
Can you really
shoot me?
Your original?
(
- (
-
We're not
test subject
for your
experiments!
Eat this!!
(
Guh!!
(
I knew it... you guys are...
(
beasts...
- (The "Real Earthlings" surrendered. But that was the conclusion
that they had reached after many years of observation. That is, that the Other Earthlings were foolish savages.
(
Amy... It's over...
It's all over.
(
But you're still not here.
(
I won't forgive you people.
(
I'm your Amy.
Your girlfriend
that died was
an investigator.
If the investigator died,
then the "clone"
shouldn't be able
to return,
but you appeared
right in front of me.
(
Your "original'
forgave me.
He was a kind man.
(
But,
(
the one I love is you!
Ah, I missed you, Hayato!
(
While feeling an
intimate connection
with his loved one,
Hayato had some
feelings of
bitterness.
(
The
"genuine one"
and
"fake one"...
(
"Real Earth"
and
"Other Earth"
...
In the end,
which one
was truly
right...?
Hattori Akira
Corporation: Yuueisha
Weekly "Shounen Jack"
Editorial Department
( Co. ) Prince Eight
( Co.) Prince Enterprise
Prince
( Co. ) Prince
Studio
Preview of Next Episode
Tears and Tears
Hello, this is Shounen
Jack's editorial department.
Is this your first time
submitting something?
Is that so?
Then could you give me
your name and phone number?
Mashiro Moritaka-san...
Ah, a two-person team.
Takagi Akito-san.
All right.
Then, how about tomorrow?
Middle school students?
[Opening]
Okay, I understand.
Thank you very much.
Tomorrow, three o'clock,
at the reception desk.
"Tell them that they have an appointment with
Hattori-san from Weekly Shounen Jack," they said.
All of a sudden, it's set
for tomorrow. Amazing, eh?
I guess that's what you'd
expect from a publisher.
So, what do we do?
I think meeting an hour
beforehand is early enough.
How about one o'clock
at North Yakusa Station?
Just as long as we get there.
Right.
I'm going to look through the manuscript.
Yeah, let me check the lines too.
Where's Moritaka?
He came home, didn't he?
When he does come home, he
shuts himself away in his room.
I wonder if he's pushing himself too hard.
Thanks for the meal.
Mangakas sure are cool!
You have books you wrote by
yourself all lined up in a row.
I'm still a gambler though. {They are really pushing it... all
these characters had stopped showing up by this point in the manga.}
A gambler?
A mangaka is someone who can make a
living by drawing manga their whole lives.
You either need to have a
big hit or a lot of smaller hits.
Beyond that, you're just a gambler.
The drawings are good, but
I don't know about my story.
The story is good, but I don't know about my
drawings.
You're early.
You're even earlier Shuujin, why is that?
Why? Well...
Even though we worked all last
night, for some reason I woke up early.
Me too.
I just, kind of, can't sit still
about this.
My older brother asked me to
return with next week's Jack for him.
We can't ask for something like that.
By the way, your brother goes
to a good college, doesn't he?
After he failed to get into the national
university, he basically stopped trying.
Now he spends all his time with club
activities and going on group dates every day.
Enjoying his youth, that sort of thing.
I guess he sees what's ahead of him.
So that's why you thought of becoming a mangaka? {qc - possibly remove
question mark, not a direct question, more of a false assumption}
No, the reason why I decided not to become
a salaryman was because of my parents.
My dad used to work at Oute Bank... {Proper elongation?
If this is incorrect, you can change it back}
Dad's going to be late today as well?
Yes.
What about big brother?
He said that he has a cram
school test, so he'll be late.
Acchan, so that you don't
lose to your big brother,
you must study hard, okay?
Okay...
Oh yeah, how did this afternoon's test go?
My old lady was a high school teacher.
Every day she'd fervently
make me and my brother study.
You're amazing, Acchan.
I'm sure you'll make your dad proud.
Actually, by watching me study,
it felt like she was
trying to distract herself.
For the next one, keep
it up and do your best.
Well, that's how it feels,
thinking about it now.
But even so...
Why?!
So covering for your boss's responsibility
means getting fired, doesn't it?
There's nothing I can do.
Nothing you can do?
Then what are we going to do?
Huh? What?
What about our kids and the mortgage we still have to pay on the house? {This is kind of an approximation
because this very hard to hear. You can kind of infer the parts that you can't hear though.}
To be honest, back then I didn't
really understand what was going on.
I'm home.
Welcome back.
You went shopping, Dad?
Your mother asked me to.
Let me go with you next time.
Sure, next time.
It's a promise.
Then when I was the in
fifth grade of elementary...
Avenge.
Your dad...
You've got to avenge him, okay?
Acchan...
Avenge?
Does that mean work at the
bank and become a manager?
Was that why she was making me study?
When I thought that, I started to hate it.
Or rather, I just couldn't take it anymore.
Acchan...
I'm...
I'm not your tool, Mom!
I'll decide my own future!
Ever since then, they haven't
had any objections about what I do.
They're good parents, really.
Ah, sorry.
I got a little melodramatic there.
Then, it was the same with you
wanting to become a mangaka with me?
Yeah, they know; they're ignoring it.
What?
No, I'm glad I got to hear it.
You're smart,
but I've been a little unsure if I can rely on
you when it comes to plans about the future.
Well, maybe you were right to think that.
All right, how about we get going?
Okay.
Finally, huh?
I can't believe middle school boys
like us can bring in a manuscript.
It's like a dream.
As long as you just write a manuscript,
they say anyone can bring one in.
The problem is how that work is judged.
Yeah.
What business do you
have at the company today?
Ah, um, we came to bring in a manuscript...
Then please follow the
procedure at the reception desk.
T-Thank you very much.
Welcome, how may I help you?
We came to bring in a manuscript.
Do you have an appointment?
Y-Yes, at three o'clock with
Hattori-san from Weekly Shounen Jack.
In that case, please fill this out. {The
paper already has English for all the boxes.}
T-There are two of us, so
shouldn't each of us fill one out?
No, it'll be fine as long as
you fill in the number of people.
Uh-Uhm, I'm still a student, so what
should I put for company name and such?
Well for that, just to be safe, please just put in your school's name. {This is all really
important. I can't believe there was no "how do I fill out the form" scene in the manga.}
Ah, I'm sorry, I made a mistake!
It's okay, I'll give you a new card.
I-I'm done.
Good job.
Please wait just a minute.
Okay, however long it takes.
She said it'd just be a minute.
This is the reception desk.
Takagi-sama and
Mashiro-sama are here to see you.
Yes.
Sorry for the wait.
Hattori-san will be down very soon.
Please wait in booth
number three over there.
Thanks for your time.
Thank you very much.
Bringing something into Jack...
doesn't mean we are going
to the editorial department.
Looks like it.
I understand your enthusiasm,
but...
You need to be more
considerate of the readers.
Yes, Sir...
So let's just forget either of
us ever saw this manuscript.
Eh? {Mistral suggested adding this line
because it was missing. Maybe finetime it?}
So, think about it some more
and try drawing something else.
I'll be waiting for an
interesting manga next time.
T-Thank you very much...
D-Did you hear that just now?
He brought something in, like us.
Probably.
I was pretty confident
on the way here, but...
I'm worried we're going to be
told that what we have is shit.
It'd be scarier to be heavily praised the
very first time you brought something in.
My uncle used to say that if they offered
you tea, it was a success up to that point.
R-Really?
Takagi-kun and Mashiro-kun?
Ah, yes!
I'm Hattori from Weekly
Shounen Jack, nice to meet you.
Nice to meet you!
Well, to start with, may
I see your manuscript?
Ah, okay.
Please, go ahead.
You two don't need to be so up tight.
O-Okay.
Let me read it one more time.
[Eyecatch]
. {He reads it word for word. Typset it if you want, doesn't matter. There's also the option of ONLY typsetting and
not putting in regular subtitles for this part except when there's nothing written onscreen. But I'm fine, typsetter can decide that.}
The Earth we live on is not the real Earth.
It is all nothing but a duplicate
made for observation and experiments.
.
Having been injured in a war
and returning home, Hayato...
stepped on the ground of his
homeland for the first time in years.
It was a cruel world.
Pull yourself together Hayato.
I saw her.
It's so bright...
When the light that covered his body disappeared,
he was in a place he did not recognize.
Where... am I?
Amy!
Please wait, Amy!
Why are you running?!
Welcome, "other" Hayato-kun.
You're calling me "other?"
What are you talking about?
Yes, the "Real Earth."
The "Other Earth", where you clones live...
is a test model made for
the sake of the "Real Earth."
In order for us "Real Earthlings"
to simulate different scenarios.
Having gotten too close to the
truth, Hayato was taken prisoner.
A resistance organization calling
themselves rescued people like him.
Then, you guys too?
Yes, we're "Other Earthlings."
In order for them to send in
investigators, they take us clones captive.
Then when the investigators return, our
memories are erased and we're sent back again.
But if the investigators get into
some sort of trouble and end up dead,
we lose our means of getting home
and have no choice but to live here.
In this god♪♪♪♪ annoying utopia.
If it's a way home you need, I have one!
Having returned to the "Other Earth",
Hayato reported the truth to the populace.
Now, it's time to let them know that we
are not their puppets to be manipulated!
Then, the counterattack of
the "Other Earthlings" began.
Hey, hey.
Can you really shoot me?
Your "original"?
We are not test subject
for your experiments!
Eat this!
I knew it, you guys are...
The "Real Earthlings" surrendered.
But that was the conclusion that they had
reached after many years of observation.
That is, that the "Other Earthlings" were foolish savages. {These
two lines are in the same box, they're just separated by a space.}
Amy, It's over...
I won't forgive you!
I'm your Amy.
Your girlfriend that
died was an investigator.
If the investigator died, then the
clone shouldn't be able to return,
but you appeared right in front of me.
Your "original" forgave me.
the one I love is you!
I missed you, Hayato!
While feeling an intimate
connection with his loved one,
Hayato had some feelings of bitterness.
The genuine one and the fake one.
"Real Earth" and "Other Earth."
In the end, which one was truly right?
You guys did well.
I'm getting some coffee,
do you want anything?
W-We'll both have coffee too, please.
Right?
Y-Yeah.
Um, did you think up the story together?
No, I did the story and
Mashiro did the drawings.
It's totally split.
I see.
Are you trying to become pros?
Yes, as soon as we can!
Well, I'll give you my opinions
on the story first then, okay?
All right.
As a whole, it's a well
put together sci-fi story,
and I think people who like
that would be drawn into it.
Okay.
But this is more of a
novel than it is a manga.
There's too much narration and
the lines are very expositional too.
Unless the story progresses through the drawings and
characters, there's no point in it being a manga.
We decided I wouldn't interfere in about the
story, so I didn't say anything about it,
But for an editor, saying
something like that is a given.
As a story, it's really well made.
So maybe you would be suited
to do something like a light novel?
No, I definitely want to be an original author
for a manga.
I wonder if we can
have faith in this person?
Is that so?
And, Mashiro-kun, wasn't it?
Yes.
I think you definitely have a
great ability for rough sketching.
Thank you.
But even so, this isn't manga artwork.
There are too many lines, there's no difference in
lines between the characters and the background.
Put in more distortion.
You need to make the
drawings your own style.
Okay.
Mashiro has only been
using a pen for two months.
Two months?
Really?
Y-Yes.
If that's true, I'll really be looking
forward to what you do in the future.
Do you two like this kind of story?
So you're saying that it doesn't stand
out as something you'd see in ?
Takagi-kun, you're the type who writes while calculating
how you can become popular and sell, aren't you?
This might be just my observation, but
there are two general types you
can divide successful mangaka into.
First, there are the types that put everything they
have into drawing what they want and make a hit.
If you're being positive, you
could say they're geniuses.
If you're speaking negatively,
you might call them naturals.
Then there are ones like Takagi-kun, the type that
calculates as much as they can to produce a hit.
However, the ones who make big hits are,
overwhelmingly, the people who don't calculate.
Ah, sorry. Maybe that wasn't
the best way to phrase it.
I suppose what I'm saying is, those who draw with
calculation have much higher hurdles to overcome.
On the other hand, the ones who can
produce hits by calculating are strong.
They won't be done after just one work.
Even for us editors,
those types are life-savers.
I can't force you,
but I would like for you to not bring
your work to any other publishers.
If possible, I'd like to
see you two later as well.
Let's do our best together in .
If anything comes up, send me and
e-mail at the address I wrote on there.
When I have time, I'll reply.
Don't get so excited over an email address.
When I find a golden egg, I give out my
cell phone number without a second thought.
You guys are still around bronze.
Not only did he give us thorough
opinions, he's being this frank with us.
For now I think I'm going to send this manuscript
around for the monthly award, is that okay?
Monthly award?
You mean the excellence award given
to one of the works submitted every month?
So, does that mean it's good?
It's not that easy.
But with manga, you get ten different
opinions from ten different people.
There might even be people who
say that this could get into the finals.
To be honest, even we don't
know for sure what'll be a hit or not.
If we did, there wouldn't be
new series that end so quickly.
A work becoming a hit is,
for the most part, a gamble.
Beyond that, you're just a gambler.
Please contact me once
you've got your next work done.
Until then.
It's been nice working with you!
Thank you very much.
It was a success, right?
On the first work we brought in, he gave us
his business card and even his email address.
What do you think, Shuujin?
About what?
I think Hattori-san was good.
Yeah, I think so too.
Hey, how did it go? {how'd / how did